New Story

hey everybody I'm writing a new story and so I'm going to be posting little snippits of it here and there... so yeah, I'm thinking it's going to be good, but I guess we'll see where it takes us! I think that the best part of the story is suspense.  Without that, how can you get people to read it?  Suspense is key in writing any fiction novel, so without further to say, I'm going to give you a little intro type thing to my new project.  You know how on the back of books it has a little quote or a little plot synopsis of the book?  Well, this is kind of my 'back of the book' thing... (yeah, I'm kind of a nerd like that...I also design my own covers and I know what I want to say in the acknowledgment page and all that other jazz...I even have some actors picked out for when it becomes a movie!).  Tell me if you like this little thing!!!  Without further to do, I give you (Some snazzy title that I will come up with shortly for my book):

"You know those monsters your mother told you weren't real? They are.  But they don't hide under beds and in closets; instead they wait here, in this realm.  They know when you're alone and when you're asleep, that that is when they come---leaving this world for the land of the living---to prey on frightened children and lost strangers.  They are quick, smart, and strong.  This is their world.  Here we are visitors---the prey.  Only one person can stop them, but I don't know who that is yet.  I've only been given temporary power.  I'm just the care-taker until whomever is to receive this power comes to claim it."